Potrait artist at Teluk Cempedak

[fulat]

guys,

please give c&c to this photo. all c&c is welcome.

http://img257.imageshack.us/img257/6088/dsc3971zk1.jpg

[leslie]

the artist's drawing paper is Over exposed, i cannot see details of the person being drawn. Can't make out yet, only faint signs of eye and nose. You might want to tone down on the exposure of the paper cause everything else about the tone of the paper does not blend in with the overall picture.

[fulat]

ok.. got ya.. thanx for the c&c. :D

[ckchowov]

fu1at -- why u post this under 'challenge' forum ?

[fulat]

ah chow,

seed for improvement.

[noruazumi]

ok.. here we go!
fu1at
this picture doesn't work for me. like leslie said, the sketch of the kid was overexposure by the flash. i do understand how's the lighting condition in Teluk Cempedak since it is one of my favorite hang-out places whenever i go back to my hometown, Kuantan.
a few suggestions that may help.
1) try to wait until the artist almost finish with the sketch. by doing that, u'll bring out more details in the sketch.
2) this picture too loose as it needs crop so that viewer can focus on the main subject which is the sketch.
3) flash lighting source need to be repositioned so that u can avoid the shadow of the artist's head cause by the flash.
4) it'll look better in portrait orientation. make the picture tighter.

that's all i think. hope u'll not :boxer: after this. :angelgrin:

[fulat]

azumi,

it's ok... i know where it went wrong... thank you for ya comments. appreciate~ :partyon:

[well2k26]

fulat.. here i come to comment.. this pic is intresting but u can make it better with correct technique. The colour is too yellowish and the flash should be bouch flash to eliminate ths shadow ... pic is noisy cos hgih iso and u can shoot abit higher and cover the whole potrait pic on the paper. Just my 2 cent

[loominpapa]

you could try and use an increased depth of field to make the subjects face clearer (less out of focus) thereby making thecomparison between artists drawing and face easier. You can still keep the focus on the paper though, just use a smaller aperture.

[fulat]

thank you well2k26 and loominpapa for the comments. will try it out next time. :D

[noordin]

You have to ask yourself "what am I trying to convey" to my viewers. What is the main subject. Is it the girl? Is it the sketch? The main subject has to be sharp, you have to lead the viewer to your viewpoint.

Well that's what I would do with this kind of portrait. :D

[fulat]

i wanna focus on the potrait drawing. but the flash light doesnt turn out to be what i wanted... :rolleyes:

[max]

1. Technical
The lack of DOF is not very well used here. This picture is best taken with a wide angle lens. Exposure setting need to be adjusted. I find the close proximity to a black object always overexposes the picture.

2. Composition
There are a lot of spaces around the subject. Should make full use of the space like recomposing the image

3. Comments
Overall the idea was good but the execution lacked the impact which it was intended.

[fulat]

thank you max for ya opinion. will keep that in mind for next try out. :D

[simonliu]

I think there was a slight handshake. Should try to maybe bounce the flash and may need to fine tune the WB as well.

[HCN]

ok.. here we go!
3) flash lighting source need to be repositioned so that u can avoid the shadow of the artist's head cause by the flash.
:angelgrin:

Noruazumi, based on 3rd point, can we adjust the flash to face certain angle to ceiling? I'm still learning too. :D

Thanks.

[clax]

its like 3 segment
front blur ,center sharp and back blur